Monday, September 15, 2008

2.Fire

“Vinith, go do your choirs”, my mother exclaimed as she went to work. I decided to iron my clothes first. I shuffled my way to the ironing board. There was a basket full of clothes for me to iron. I switched on the iron and waited for it to get heated. My task was to iron all my t-shirts.

While waiting for it to get heated, the phone started to ring. It was my friend, Akbar. He wanted to discuss about Ms Tan`s lesson today. Akbar was going on and on and on, and I completely forgot about my ironing. Suddenly, I smelt something burning followed by the sight of smoke bellowing out of the window which I ironed next to.

I raced back up to find a fire on my room curtain, the fire was spreading rapidly throughout my room. I ran down to get a bucket of water from my kitchen. By the time I came it had spread throughout the second storey of my house. I twist and turned to find a way between the fire where I can put it out. Soon I was trapped, surrounded by menacing flames.

The flames circled around me as if having a victory dance for their successful capture. I was falling in and out of consciousness, soon after I was in oblivion. When I woke up I was in a hospital. I was surrounded by my friends and family. The fire was due to my carelessness. I will never forget this horrible ordeal.

3 comments:

tsooc said...

Dear Vinith,

Great effort. Keep it up. You can also slow down the part before you fainted by describing your feelings. For the ending, tell me what happened while you were unconscious. Who saved you? What happened to your house? What did your parents say?

YHLin said...

you can describe more abt your feelings,the fire and akbar.

YHLin said...

i mean akbar's feelings